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Showing posts with label proofing. Show all posts
Showing posts with label proofing. Show all posts

Wednesday, 11 April 2018

Providing Positive Critique

I got asked by a colleague what I would say if someone submitted a piece for publication, but if it was not up to snuff. As most of us are volunteers, when we see a poorly finished piece, we see more work that we have to do.

However, it is not the editor's job to copy-edit a piece. The editor's job is to concept edit.

I had a long think about it, and told my colleague that I think that the best way to write a reply is to imagine this was our own article, then write a response in a way that we'd like to have someone do for us… with honesty, dignity and respect. I would go back to the author and ask if they – or someone they know – could proof/edit/revise it.

Starting with positive feedback is always good, to establish the value of the article to us. For example, tell the author “Thanks so much for your article. I really like how you did [W] and how you wove in [X]”. Then later in your response, tell them “However, I’m really sorry, but I don't think this is quite ready for publication yet. From my quick look, there seem to be a number of proofing errors which I feel would be detrimental to your professional reputation if it were published as is. It would be a lot stronger if it was revised and proofed, then resubmitted.”

Conclude with "We are very keen to publish your article, so please let me know when you can have it back to us. Ideally we would like to release it in our next issue, so would like your updated version by 25 February."

You could supply a few of the things below where you saw a pattern in the writing - but only if you felt comfortable, and if you were sure it wasn’t going to be rude or condescending:
  • A list of typos that they need to address. Some examples might include: “Ensure you capitalise consistently; check that you aren’t using homophones; double-check that plurals do not have possessive apostrophes; check that the tense used is consistent throughout; check your use of commas; check your use of colons is correct; ensure your adjective use is correct; ensure your adverb use is correct; check that your sentences are complete (ie, contains both subject and object); break run on sentences into two or three shorter sentences; ensure your tone is consistent throughout (ie, first person all the way through)”.
  • Then there are the paragraph issues: “sometimes your transition between paragraphs is bumpy; sometimes you don’t use topic sentences to lead your paragraphs; sometimes you don’t have concluding sentences in paragraphs; sometimes your paragraph breaks are in the middle of an idea”.
  • Then there are the structural writing issues: “Sometimes your flow of ideas is unclear; sometimes the evidence is unclear; sometimes your narrative is muddied by an unnecessary side-trip (but the side-trip would make an interesting article on its own: could you write a piece on that for us for our next issue?); ensure that your findings are consistent with the field (or if not, explain why, giving references).”

If the author comes back to us asking questions on any of these, we should go can go back with specific examples, such as “What I meant by [Y] is where you wrote [Z] on page 3.”

Remember that it is possible that our writer may have other things going on in their lives; they may have sent a draft document; they may be dyslexic. A bit of kindness goes a long way.


Sam
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Friday, 15 September 2017

Cutting the fat

Does the idea of editing text to trim the fat make you grind your teeth? Yep, it does me too. However, sometimes when we write we add in lots of redundancy that only a REALLY good prune can fix.

The wonderful thing is that, like a good haircut allows others to really see our face, a good copy-edit allows our message to stand out more clearly.

For example, on the Berkeley course I have been doing, we were asked to copy-edit a piece of writing for clarity. The original piece of writing was 204 words long. I rewrote it to 113 words, and I don't think I lost the meaning in the process.

I looked at compacting phrases, reordering and regrouping ideas to clearly show time progression. I looked at paragraph breaks so ideas were complete on their own. I looked at stripping out redundancy and trying to clarify topics. What I came up with was:



Original:
Every single time I had to do a writing assignment, I was always really unhappy and miserable. Due to my complete lack of confidence as well as my total inability to express ideas of mine on paper, I believed that I had to work almost twice as hard as any other student in this world. This included spending hours and hours looking at a blank page and spending more hours editing essays of mine, just to make sure I had really appropriate content, organization, and grammar. Since English was not my first language, I was concerned that I would not do so very well at the university. When I entered the class offered by College Writing, everything changed in a positive way due to the fact that my writing skills increased throughout the semester.

In the beginning of the semester, I had a lot of trouble with my first couple of essays; however, with careful analysis, patience, and my will to succeed, I started to write essays that I was quite proud of. I learned that if I could relate any topic of any essay with my personal experience, I believed that these essays were truly good, and would submit it to my instructor.


204 words
Copy-edited:
I was unhappy with my past writing assignments, due to a lack of confidence and an inability to clearly express ideas, resulting in spending hours looking at a blank page. I felt I worked twice as hard as others, editing for hours to ensure appropriate content, organization, and grammar.















Since English was not my first language, I was concerned that I would fail at university, but the College Writing class increased my writing skills. Initially, I had trouble; however, I learned to relate essay topics to my personal experience which helped me reach submission standard. With careful analysis, patience, and my will to succeed, I started to write essays to be proud of.

113 words

Feedback on what I came up with, and what I missed, would be great!


Sam
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